The Official Begonian Legacy topic

Rolanth?

So I'm mostly caught up in your CYOA now Emperor, and if Serlen hasn't already gotten hitched, I'm rooting for everyone's favorite ex prisoner. I like her character a lot more than Verdani, and.... Honestly, Verdani reminds me too much of my Idoun. Which is odd, considering the two aren't even alike. Maybe it's the whole silver haired dragon priestess thing. Yeah, that must be it.

Also, I am so going to have Vincent call Serlen a 'joking pervert prince'. I will find a way!

You should catch up on my Idoun then. You can read her first two supports with Trail in UB6 over on GF. Her A and S supports with Trail will also be next camp.

And yes, I mean Antigone. She is awesome. She's reminds me a lot of Thorn from UB, so maybe that's why I like her so much. Both characters even started as prisoners. She even has a badass name to boot! Anti-Gone! Get it? Get it?!



Also, I did notice a difference between the two Serlens. Interesting.

Trail is still married to Kanis, and they currently have two children(one unborn, and 4 total if you count Rhia and Ethan). You have missed quite a bit. I highly suggest you read all 6 prior topics. It shouldn't take that long.

And yay! I'm happy my Thorn inspired someone else's character, even if only a little bit.

Good question, at first I wanted to connect the two, but both were entirely different topics and one was not my work.
I did not want to make Austur and Begonia canon as to avoid such a thing because t would be wrong.
So no the two Serlens are completely different.

Just a small gripe about Chapter 10, nothing major. So far, your CYOA seems pretty solid. But, in Chapter 10, it lost some of it's believability for me. So, my beef:

A longtime ally suddenly invades, gotcha. And they have a much superior force, okay that makes sense, as they haven't been involved in prolonged warfare. But, then Serlen, a young boy and inexperienced commander, makes a decision to retreat. A very wise decision, I might add. And then, he returns to the castle, only to get reprimanded by a much more experienced leader?

First off, as a real life Commander who has served in war, I can say with certainty the voters made the right call. In war, sacrifices must be made. All leaders know this. It is a harsh fact of war that keeps us up all night for our entire lives. If the reports were true, and Gram's forces really outnumbered them by so much, then there was nothing Serlen could have done. Any real leader knows as much. Getting yourself and all your troops killed accomplishes absolutely nothing.

Now, I do understand this is a fictional work, but there were no mitigating circumstances at the time. You didn't have any gods, dragons etc, that would make up for the difference in numbers, aside from maybe Gunnar. So, in short, there would have been no realistic way for Serlen to overcome those odds. Which means it would have been a death trap.

Sorry for the rant, I'll cut it short. Was this a character choice? For the King to make the wrong call, or not understand? Is something wrong with him, and Serlen is just too naive to realize it? Because if it's a character choice, and I'm just not at that part in the story yet...That's different.

But otherwise, I didn't find it believable at all, for a veteran of so many battles like the King to not understand something so simple as the Law of Warfare.

Alright, thanks for the feedback Neo.
Damon is a fierce believer in not retreating, so thats why he became angry.
That, and the fact he lost one of his own villages is a strike to his pride.
I admit it was more anger that he acted on which over rided the fact that Serlen is inexperienced in war.