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Post by empireoffire on Nov 2, 2016 17:36:02 GMT -6
I want feedback on my RP writing.
Guidelines:
1. There's a fine line between giving criticisms and insulting. "I think this ship is lacking and could be made better by doing/not doing this" and not "this ship is s*** and no one can ever give a reason for ever liking it if I asked", for example. Keep it clean and above the belt.
2. Criticize mailbags if you really want to, but those are meant to be comparatively lax (if long) to write and I tend to turn off 90% of my brain while doing so. I intend to keep it that way for my own personal enjoyment.
3. 70% of my earliest Nova writing is going to be super sloppy compared to my "modern" stuff, so it's probably not worth bringing those up.
Lay it on me. Word it not-rudely and I probably won't get offended. Please don't make me consider this to have been a bad idea.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 2, 2016 18:09:03 GMT -6
You're an awesome writer and way better than I'll ever be. You're great at writing sexy Mailbags, whilst mine was rather lackluster in the sexiness department.
Your chracters are well-written and consistent and I envy your skill and precision.
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Post by empireoffire on Nov 2, 2016 18:13:19 GMT -6
You're an awesome writer and way better than I'll ever be. You're great at writing sexy Mailbags, whilst mine was rather lackluster in the sexiness department.
Your chracters are well-written and consistent and I envy your skill and precision.
I want criticism on how to try to be better, not just kind words. Though I do appreciate them~. <3 |
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Post by empireoffire on Nov 3, 2016 13:52:01 GMT -6
C'mon gaiz, there's gotta be something. Is a character too unsympathetic? Am I trying too hard to make a character sympathetic? Did a character or an action ever come across as unnatural and unrealistic? Do my fight scenes lack good descriptions? Did something (within my power) seem heavily contrived, nonsensical, or sloppy? Do I have a list of "Emppy tropes" I should probably be wary about? Things like that.
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Post by SummerCrow on Nov 3, 2016 14:16:43 GMT -6
Emmpy-tropes? Hardened gunslinger loner awkward cowboy type.
Das it.
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Post by empireoffire on Nov 3, 2016 15:24:38 GMT -6
Emmpy-tropes? Hardened gunslinger loner awkward cowboy type. Das it. ...But only Sterling's a cowboy. And the only Nova character that's primarily a gunslinger is Emma. And outside that RP it's only Irving and Sterling again. |
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Post by SpringForest on Nov 3, 2016 15:47:45 GMT -6
I'd give you criticism if I found anything I thought needed it. But so far, it seems like you're doing just fine.
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Post by SummerCrow on Nov 3, 2016 16:09:08 GMT -6
Emmpy-tropes? Hardened gunslinger loner awkward cowboy type. Das it. ...But only Sterling's a cowboy. And the only Nova character that's primarily a gunslinger is Emma. And outside that RP it's only Irving and Sterling again. Gunslinger/Gladiator/GeneralBadass type. |
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Post by SwordMasterEX on Nov 3, 2016 16:39:06 GMT -6
Hmm, emmpy tropes. Let's see, love comes with tragedy, characters should be Hollywood beautiful, Never start at the top, um that's all I can think of at the moment and none of them are anything to watch out for.
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Post by HHDeception on Nov 3, 2016 18:42:23 GMT -6
Not enough Yancy mailbag
I don't pay enough attention to people's posts in general to be able to nail down critisisms to give.
That said, your writing is always quality but I find myself paying more attention to your character moments than your action scenes but I don't particularly know why.
I'll pay more attention from here on though and I ever do find something to critisize I'll put it here.
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