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Post by kjmccloud on Jan 12, 2015 15:46:12 GMT -6
EH because the light/staves combination is too legit, and
47 because I'm going to turn her into a magic archer too.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 13, 2015 21:43:48 GMT -6
Polls are closed.
Ann
Starting weapon
E.) Light Magic
H.) Staves
Sophie's
Starting Weapon
3.) Ax
4.) Bow
Rosalina
Starting Weapons
Anima Magic
Light Magic
Polls are closed will have update soon
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Post by Deleted on Jan 14, 2015 17:07:55 GMT -6
"Ready when you are," Ann and Sophie called out to Rosalina. "Hold on its almost that time ladies," Rosalina called out to Sophie and Ann as they looked at each other confused. "You will see, soon enough," Rosalina said. BGM; Jr. Troopa arrives"Hey who said you could be here without my permission," Jr. Troopa called out. "This is my place and you better have a good reason for being here in my play ground," Jr Troopa demanded. "Aww how cute," Ann and Sophie said about Jr Troopa. "Its not cute, its mean coming here messing up my things," Jr Troopa moaned. "How do people own playgrounds?" Ann asked. "I don't Fletching....I mean know ms," Flan chimed in. "Must be something related to this world, what a strange place," Sophie said. "Are you ignoring me?" Jr Troopa said. "That's it I was going to go easy on you but you asked for this, boys come on out," Jr Troopa called out as 5 goombas joined him. "Well you did ask for something more challenging," Rosalina said. "Yeah its a shame he's really cute but oh well," Ann said readying her weapons. "Your right, hopefully he puts up more of a fight then those goombas," Sophie said as the group ready the weapons. Stats and Choices will be coming next post..... |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 15, 2015 17:29:18 GMT -6
Stats
Sophie
Class
Winged Fighter
Lv 5
Exp 0
HP. 26(+5)
Str 13
Def 7
Mg 6
Res 7
Luck 8
Weapon Levels
Ax (D) Bronze Ax (50/50) (+4) Bow Iron Bow (D) (40/40) (+6)
Skills
Winged Unit ( has all of the gifts of a pegaus knight but is vulnerable to wind magic and bows)
HP + 5 (self exclanatory)
Ann
Class
Cleric
Lv 5
Exp 0
HP 21
Str 5
Def 5
Mg 8
Res 8
Luck 8
Weapon Levels
Light (D) Shine (mag +6) (35/35). Staves (D) Heal (HP + 15) (40/40)
Skills
Miracle (potential to survive a lethal hit % = Luck x 2)
Merchant's touch (can get 25% off when buying items and 25% more coins when selling items)
Rosalina
Class
Light Mage
Lv 5
Exp 0
HP 22
Str 3
Def 6
Mg 12(+2)
Res 8
Luck 7
Weapon Levels
Anima (D) Thunder (45/45) (mag + 4). Light (D) Shine (35/35) (mag +6)
Skills
Lights gift (allows unit to use Light magic regardless of class)
Magic (+2 to Magic)
VS....
Goomba (x5)
HP5(x5)
Str10(x5)
Def0(x5)
mag0(x5)
res0(x5)
Luck10(x5)
Skills
Head Bonk (Deafult attack; str.)
Charge (takes one turn to x2 attack next turn; trigger % = Luck/2)
Jr Troopa
HP25
Str15
Def5
mag0
res7
Luck20
Skills
Tackle (Default Attack; Mgt = Str)
Inventory
Mushrooms (HP + 10); 10
1 up mushroom (revive, HP/2); 1
Coins 500
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Post by Deleted on Jan 15, 2015 17:30:04 GMT -6
Choices
Sophie
I will focus on using my .....
A.) Ax
B.) Bow
I will target ......
C.) The Goombas (RNG will focus on Goombas first)
D.) Jr. Troopa
Ann
I think I will support the part by
1.) Healing wounds
2.) Using Magic
My target will be (for magic only)
3.) The goombas
4.) Jr. Troopa
Finally we should be ...... when it comes to healing??
5.) Cautouis (will use item or spell when HP <75%)
6.) Moderate (" " HP </= 50%)
7.) Loose ("" HP < 25%)
Rosalina
I will focus on using
I.) Thunder
II.) Shine
I should focus on
III.) Goombas
IV.) Jr. Troopa
There's the choices polls are now open. Good Luck.....
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Post by Deleted on Jan 15, 2015 17:48:00 GMT -6
Choices Sophie I will focus on using my ..... A.) Ax B.) Bow I will target ...... C.) The Goombas (RNG will focus on Goombas first) D.) Jr. Troopa Ann I think I will support the part by 1.) Healing wounds 2.) Using Magic My target will be (for magic only) 3.) The goombas 4.) Jr. Troopa Finally we should be ...... when it comes to healing?? 5.) Cautouis (will use item or spell when HP <75%) 6.) Moderate (" " HP </= 50%) 7.) Loose ("" HP < 25%) Rosalina I will focus on using I.) Thunder II.) Shine I should focus on III.) Goombas IV.) Jr. Troopa There's the choices polls are now open. Good Luck..... BC2ModerateI |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 17, 2015 11:40:38 GMT -6
Last call for votes. Will run the RNG tonight after work
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Post by kjmccloud on Jan 17, 2015 17:45:06 GMT -6
Switch moderate to loose, and I'm down with the above choices. Ain't much point in wasting heal items so early, right?
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Post by Deleted on Jan 17, 2015 22:09:43 GMT -6
Will keep poll open a little longer long day at work.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 18, 2015 22:39:21 GMT -6
Bgm; Jr. Troopa Battle"Ready ladies," Rosalina called out to Ann and Sophie. "Ready," Ann replied as she used shine on a Goomba instantly defeating it. "Man are these things weak," Ann commented. "Hey Sophie where are you heading off to?" Ann asked. "To take care of the annoying but cute one," Sophie replied as she brought her ax down upon Jr. Troopa. "Nice form Sophie, I taught you well," Rosalina commented as she used a blast of light magic to take down a Goomba. "Bob, Ted," one of the Goombas called out. "That's cold, they had families, children, I'll show you," the Goomba called out bonking Ann. "Hey what about Peach over there," Gom called out going towards Rosalina. "Yeah lord Bowser would please if we can get her," Ba called out as the two goombas attacked Rosalina. "Rosalina," Sophie called out of concern. "Ha ha jerk this is what you get for dropping your guard," Jr Troopa said as he attacked Sophie by jumping on her head. "Ouch you jerk that hurts," Sophie said as she got Jr. Troopa with a near fatal blow. Jr Troopa was breathing heavy now as Ann took out another Goomba. "Boss you okay get the winged freak," the Goombas called out going after Sophie. "Heh double trouble, let's see how you like this," the two Goombas said as they each landed hits on Sophie. "This is where I get my revenge," Jr Troopa said getting ready to jump on top of Sophie. "Yoohoo forgot about me," Rosalina said as she raised her hand. As soon as Rosalina raised her hand a bolt of lightning struck Jr. Troopa knocking him out cold. "Boss," the two..... make that the remaining Goomba called out. "Bro what happened?" Gom asked but found his answer while Sophie was just grinning at him. "Sorry, sorry miss, I swear I never meant anything I can change," Gom pleaded with Sophie. "I accept your apology," Sophie told the frightened Gom. "But I think my friends over there are a little less forgiving," Sophie said as she flew away from Gom. "Ready, Ann," Rosalina called out, as a ball of light was floating in front of her. "Ready," Ann replied as she had a ball of light in front of her. Poor Gom was unable to do anything as the two balls of light released a beam that merged with one another and crashing into Gom. When the light resided all that could be seen was an extra crispy Goomba that was laying out cold. "Think we overdid it?" Ann asked Rosalina. "Nah," Rosalina replied as the battle drew to a close. |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 18, 2015 22:40:39 GMT -6
Will have an updated stat screen plus the first official end of chapter things coming up tomorrow. Since this is just for the prolong it will be shorter then most. Maybe a brief recap a little set up for part 1 ch.1 and a scene or 2 involving Anna??
The chapters will last longer then one battle this was just the prolong so I wanted to keep it brief.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 9:18:56 GMT -6
Hm. Add a E at the end of ax, X.
This story is getting off to a good start, but I want it to attract more readers. If there's anything you need help on, don't hesitate to ask
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 16:02:28 GMT -6
Thanks Fennekin. At this point I am not sure how to attract more readers. I do have this on Gamefaqs so I have that but if you want to help spread the word that would be greatly appreciated.
While I am here I would like to get everyone's opoinon on what you think of the reboot so far
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 16:53:51 GMT -6
Thanks Fennekin. At this point I am not sure how to attract more readers. I do have this on Gamefaqs so I have that but if you want to help spread the word that would be greatly appreciated. While I am here I would like to get everyone's opoinon on what you think of the reboot so far The premise is good so far, just a lot of punctuation mistakes. Don't worry, I mess up with the same stuff all the time. Ask Brian. Run-on sentences are also attacking this good CYOA. I don't see anything else plaguing it headed that. Like my earlier correction of the word axe; it can be easily fixed. Just re-read over what you've typed and correct things that seem incorrect. Ex. Incorrect: Bowser roared as he stare at them with rage, "What are you doing in my lair?!" He bellowed not paying attention. Correct: Bowser roared as he stared at the three women with rage. "What are you doing in my lair?!" He bellowed, not paying attention. ^Those were my own made-up events. Nothing you wrote, but compare both of them punctuation and grammar wise. Like I said, X, it's nothing major, but it would also help a long way in recruiting more readers when they see the structure. Keep up the good work, and I hope I'm not insulting you in any way. It's not my intentions. If I am, sorry. |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 17:28:42 GMT -6
Nah its okay Fennekin that's why I ask, because maybe the reader notices something I missed.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 18:04:57 GMT -6
"Ann, Sophie are you ready two ready to go?" Rosalina called out as a launch star appeared.
"Yes ma ma Rosalina," Ann and Sophie called out mockingly towards Rosalina.
"Sigh you know you don't have to call me that your not a Luma," Rosalina sighed as Sophie and Ann made their way over to her.
"Ann you have gotten so strong," Flan thought. "Sorry I didn't believe you before," Flan continued. "I should have known something was fishy about her, but I promise to make things right," Flan thought to herself.
"Are you coming you silly bird?" Ann called out towards Flan.
"Fletching, I mean be right there," Flan called out flying towards Ann as the group made there way back to the Observatory.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 19, 2015 20:08:40 GMT -6
BGM: End of prolonge (Kingdom in Chaos) Later that evening while everyone else was sleeping Ann pulled out her dirary and began to write End of Prolonge
Dear Dirary,
Fate is a mysterouis mistress having brought me, Sophie, and (it annoys her so much but I love calling her this) Mama Rosalina together. I mean on the surface its weird how we are so close even though we couldn't be any different. Me the daughter of a merchant, my bestie Sophie a young lady with wings of the purest of white, and Mama Rosalina the guardian of the galaxy and mother of the Lumas. Finally this weird bird named Flanna, a talking Fletching who just happened to find a couple years ago while I was strolling around the kingdom. Diary, is it weird that for some reason she feel so familiar? I wonder did I meet her before back in my home world.
Well dirary me, Sophie, Rosalina, and Flan have to get ready for the seige on Bowser's castle tomorrow. One thing questions me about Mario where is he? What has Bowser come across that has Mama Rosalina wanting us to attempt to sneak into Bowser's Castle? Well anyways I am pretty tired after today's training goodnight
yours truly,
Ann
It seems the special guest Rosalina has arrived to Rosalina's Comet observatory. Let's see who's here. Location; Rosalina's Comet Observatory "Is Rosalina around?" the unknown guest asked. "She will be back soon," Lubba replied. "That's okay I can wait for her," the stranger replied. "Oh I know who you are your that guest that's suppose to help out mom tomorrow with that mission of hers," Lubba replied. "Yeah my name is......" the stranger replied. A.) Great Gonzalez Jr. (Yoshi, Cavaliar) B.) Ashley (Dark mage) C.) Prince Peasly (lord) D.) Donkey Kong (knight) E.) Choose someone if it receives enough votes they are in, the only restriction is that it has to be someone from FE or Mario universe. |
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Post by kjmccloud on Jan 20, 2015 6:56:06 GMT -6
I'd say DK for we kinda lack any solid form of defenses..
As far as errors and what not? I think the first thing that sticks out is that you've got *Prolong* into the place of *Prologue*. At first I thought it was just a typo, but I saw it on Gfaqs too.
Another thing off the top is to try and substitute in different descriptors of characters in place of their name, so instead of "how does she know Ann? What is her connection to Ann?", something like "how does Flanna know Ann? What is her connection to the young lady?"
I guess that ain't much better... but you get the idea. I'm enjoying it a lot still though.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2015 8:23:26 GMT -6
I'd say DK for we kinda lack any solid form of defenses.. As far as errors and what not? I think the first thing that sticks out is that you've got *Prolong* into the place of *Prologue*. At first I thought it was just a typo, but I saw it on Gfaqs too. Another thing off the top is to try and substitute in different descriptors of characters in place of their name, so instead of "how does she know Ann? What is her connection to Ann?", something like "how does Flanna know Ann? What is her connection to the young lady?" I guess that ain' t much better... but you get the idea. I'm enjoying it a lot still though. This as my vote. |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2015 20:18:22 GMT -6
Thank you guys, I appreciate the feed back. I will keep the polls open up a little longer.
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